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World Swirls

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World swirls things go black.
How can I take it back.
It started as harmless fun.
How did I know he had a gun.
He pulled it out I started to run.
After that there was no fun

World swirls things go black.
I really wish to take it back
Now I lie on the street
People watch as I bleed
I scream for help silently
I know the end is near
I think back to a deer
I know how it felt
Lying there, dying there

Now it all goes black
I can't  take it back
a poem about a guy getting shot
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aeris787's avatar
I disagree with uhm claw, i liked it. A little bit morbid but i think everyone has different thresholds for these sorts of things hey?
Otherwise, it's pretty good, I liked it because the atmosphere really built and it was really dark, which is what you were aiming for right? Keep writing, I'd like to see more of your stuff ^^